some angsty words from ma-kun

[ma-kun]

so I was talking with a friend one day and we got into the discussion about angst. Well, it was actually about the band Dashboard Confessional and if you know anything about DC you know its synomynous with Emo with is synomynous with angst. after arguing about the level of DC's angst. My friend made the claim that I couldnt point out or write anything angsty if it smacked me in the face.

So I wrote this

Dragons live forever, But not so little boys. but I bet if you slept forever, Id forever dream of you.

(if you cant tell I borrowed a line from peter, paul and mary.)

he said it wasnt angsty. just sappy.

so i wrote this.


What would you do for a girl you liked?
would you buy her flowers?
what of candy?
would you kiss her and hold her?
Protecter and Fight for her?
or
Would you stand back?
Would you let her love?
Another man than you?
Just so she would be happy?
If you said no to that...
and yes to fighting to win her heart.
Then you sir...
Are a better man than me.



he said it wasnt angsty, I said he was just being an ass and that it was angsty. so what do you think?

[Dark Angel]

I like it. And I think you should keep going. I couldn't really tell you if it was angsty enough, though. Someone once told me, that if you only listen to music for the sake of the lyrics, you might as well go deaf and read poetry. I'de love to here how melody goes. ^_^ After all...I like DC.

The only thing I feel makes this angsty, though is the very last two lines.

[ThE_RaVeN]

Its a good poem Kun, but not angsty, talk about crying or something, it could work.

No but seriously, its a good poem, but not angsty.

[Winged Esper]

It's kinda like implied angst. But real angsters aren't that subtle. Also, they use more imagery. Let's see...

The tiles are black and white, the moon is grey
The stars are faint and falling, for the dawn
The sink is lifeless beige
The razor just scuffed steel
I breathe in some dim color I can't see.
My life is bitter brown.
My soul is hospital pale.

So I stare at the water
Flowing down, for it is red
Pink clear red swirling,
Like watching my heart beat.
Like proving my heartbeat.
And I feel something now, because it hurts
And it is beautiful.


That's angst. (Well, the vast majority of angst poetry is also awful, like you wouldn't believe. But I left that part out. Actually, I guess this is some kinda stupid superiority thing, proving I can do angsty emo cutting poems better than the angsty emo cutting poets.) If your poem was going to be real angst, you'd have to actually mention that your heart was now an empty wasteland full of love and grief and shame, or some crap.

Note, by the way, that emo poetry angst is different from I'm-going-to-torture-my-characters-cause-I-like-seeing-innocent-readers-cry fiction angst. This is common in fanfiction especially, and it involves taking your characters and raping them, or killing their families, or giving them cancer, or giving them horrible nightmares of their dark and bloody backstory, etc. It is slightly more commonly done well than the emo poetry kind.

[ThE_RaVeN]

Theres more death in angst.

[MK]

I think I need a better deffinition of Angst.... Probably every single one of my poems havemuch angst.... but I do not understandt his word well... just as I do not understand emo well.... I just write what I want and let others interprate as they will..... that's what poetry is spose to be... well ta me... and I like lyrics.... but lyrics set to the wrong music are horrid....

[SpikyhairdVash]

hate to say, but not really all that angsty. not enough of "I hate my dad, and it is my dogs fault that life sucks so much" not that it is bad, I like your poem, but yea, more lovey than angsty.

[Imp]

whats angst?

[SpikyhairdVash]

here is dictionary.com s answer

"A feeling of anxiety or apprehension often accompanied by depression."

so, yeah, take it how you will. I think it can be a bit more complicated than this answer

[MK]

a n g s t ?

Each letter is a link the ? is to the main page.

[ThE_RaVeN]

Yer poems are lovely MK, but not so angsty as more romantic.

[MK]

That's because I havent gotten to posting the newer stuff? well maybe..... Stupid love.... bleh

[ThE_RaVeN]

:3

Okiedokies.

[DarkDesigns]

Angst is borne of frustration actually. Typically with life. Hence fairly powerless and confused teenagers getting rather angsty about no one understanding them and failing to express themselves properly.

[Imp]

I get that no one at my school understands a word I sea.